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Wiisnake
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PostSubject: Doughnut Man   Doughnut Man Icon_minitimeSat Nov 27, 2010 3:16 pm

I've finished the first comic of Doughnut Man. I hope you enjoy it and can possibly give constructive criticism
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PostSubject: Re: Doughnut Man   Doughnut Man Icon_minitimeSat Nov 27, 2010 3:20 pm

You need to work on your comedic timing.
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PostSubject: Re: Doughnut Man   Doughnut Man Icon_minitimeSat Nov 27, 2010 3:59 pm

Papytendo wrote:
You need to work on your comedic timing.

I know...
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PostSubject: Re: Doughnut Man   Doughnut Man Icon_minitimeSat Nov 27, 2010 4:38 pm

That was very weird, but I enjoyed the ending for some reason. Also the characters are rather fun to imagine. I'd probably change Donut Devil to something else (Cream Puff Devil?) so as not to be confused with our delicious hero.
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PostSubject: Re: Doughnut Man   Doughnut Man Icon_minitimeSat Nov 27, 2010 5:30 pm

Thanks JKR. Though Doughnut Devil is a doughnut because he was the first villain I made for Doughnut Man, and as such I wanted to give him sommething to distinguish him from other villains. Being a Doughnut like the hero.
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PostSubject: Re: Doughnut Man   Doughnut Man Icon_minitimeSat Nov 27, 2010 7:21 pm

You should call him DoughNot. And have his symbol be a reverse Donutman symbol. :)
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PostSubject: Re: Doughnut Man   Doughnut Man Icon_minitimeMon Nov 29, 2010 1:29 pm

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