Number of posts : 61 Registration date : 2010-06-04
Subject: Doughnut Man Sat Nov 27, 2010 3:16 pm
I've finished the first comic of Doughnut Man. I hope you enjoy it and can possibly give constructive criticism
click to read.
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Subject: Re: Doughnut Man Sat Nov 27, 2010 3:20 pm
You need to work on your comedic timing.
Wiisnake Junior Member
Number of posts : 61 Registration date : 2010-06-04
Subject: Re: Doughnut Man Sat Nov 27, 2010 3:59 pm
Papytendo wrote:
You need to work on your comedic timing.
I know...
-JKR- Hero Member
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Subject: Re: Doughnut Man Sat Nov 27, 2010 4:38 pm
That was very weird, but I enjoyed the ending for some reason. Also the characters are rather fun to imagine. I'd probably change Donut Devil to something else (Cream Puff Devil?) so as not to be confused with our delicious hero.
Wiisnake Junior Member
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Subject: Re: Doughnut Man Sat Nov 27, 2010 5:30 pm
Thanks JKR. Though Doughnut Devil is a doughnut because he was the first villain I made for Doughnut Man, and as such I wanted to give him sommething to distinguish him from other villains. Being a Doughnut like the hero.
-JKR- Hero Member
Number of posts : 709 Registration date : 2010-04-12
Subject: Re: Doughnut Man Sat Nov 27, 2010 7:21 pm
You should call him DoughNot. And have his symbol be a reverse Donutman symbol. :)
Paperboy I am Batman
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Subject: Re: Doughnut Man Mon Nov 29, 2010 1:29 pm